No. 1

Dreams quickly turn as
Midnight’s eye opens slowly
To digest morning.

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2 Responses

  1. What about the night’s eye opened slowly? Slow on the end seems to stand out a bit. IMO

  2. Have dropped the word “the” and changed to slow to slowly, thanks for the idea.

    Paul

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